Only wording problems are revised, such as "a lot of" change to “various”,"important" change to "essential"...
I think you should focus more on the sentence structure and expression of the essay.
Hi there! Sorry you were disappointed I didn't change your sentences extensively. They are predominantly fine which was why the focus of the edit is on word choice, tense, suffixes and prepositions in order for it to be of native-speaker quality. If you'd like me to take another look with a focus on sentences then I'd be happy to do so, please message me.
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修改的内容过于基础了，只是改了一些词汇，连句子结构都没有优化。。。那我找个中国老师像改雅思作文一样改改就好了？找外教的目的不就是表达方式上的优化吗，只改几个词汇没有本质的提升。
Only wording problems are revised, such as "a lot of" change to “various”,"important" change to "essential"...
I think you should focus more on the sentence structure and expression of the essay.
Hi there! Sorry you were disappointed I didn't change your sentences extensively. They are predominantly fine which was why the focus of the edit is on word choice, tense, suffixes and prepositions in order for it to be of native-speaker quality. If you'd like me to take another look with a focus on sentences then I'd be happy to do so, please message me.