Thank you for your help. Some question was not answered though, an overall comment and further suggestion would be appreciated.
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Hi Jaclyn,
Thank you for replying on holiday! I appreciate your time!
Yes you are right I guess I should put my questions here rather than putting them in the feet back comment or description... So let me rephrase my questions:
1. Do you think it is better to put two paragraph that describe my current job together at the top? I think it might be stronger, the paragraph in the middle of the passage described my motivation and achievement better. I put that paragraph in the middle so that it could show a time sequence, but I'm afraid that it's in a part that could hardly be read.
2. Do you think it is OK that I refrain from talking about my last attempt of application in 2014 fall? It remained a 7-months gap on my CV... and I also didn't talk about one of my short employment where I worked in website department in a headhunt company as it only last 4-5 months. Is it OK for me not to talk about these things?
3. Could you give me an overall comment on this essay? Or maybe, from 1 - 10 how much would you rate it? If you think it's not good, what part could I improve to make it better?
These are actually the questions I really wish to have an answer at the beginning. Instead of asking them out I put them in the comments... Now I think it's my bad, I should have asked here. Sorry, I'm pretty new to this platform and this is the first time I've ever purchase this kind of service. But I think your work is great and the essay now looks a lot better.
I'm not sure which questions are unanswered. I haven't received any messages from you since I sent the second iteration. I'd be happy to answer a question if you let me know what you'd like my suggestion on.
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嗯，问了很多问题，顾问回答的很耐心。
满意。可以在问题回答的问卷选项中添加N/A吗，不然没问问题不知道干啥…
谢谢您的反馈，我会提交给IT优化组的，感谢您对我们的支持O(∩_∩)O~
Thanks a lot! The letter looks better now.
还算满意。
Thank you for your help. Some question was not answered though, an overall comment and further suggestion would be appreciated.
Hi Jaclyn,
Thank you for replying on holiday! I appreciate your time!
Yes you are right I guess I should put my questions here rather than putting them in the feet back comment or description... So let me rephrase my questions:
1. Do you think it is better to put two paragraph that describe my current job together at the top? I think it might be stronger, the paragraph in the middle of the passage described my motivation and achievement better. I put that paragraph in the middle so that it could show a time sequence, but I'm afraid that it's in a part that could hardly be read.
2. Do you think it is OK that I refrain from talking about my last attempt of application in 2014 fall? It remained a 7-months gap on my CV... and I also didn't talk about one of my short employment where I worked in website department in a headhunt company as it only last 4-5 months. Is it OK for me not to talk about these things?
3. Could you give me an overall comment on this essay? Or maybe, from 1 - 10 how much would you rate it? If you think it's not good, what part could I improve to make it better?
These are actually the questions I really wish to have an answer at the beginning. Instead of asking them out I put them in the comments... Now I think it's my bad, I should have asked here. Sorry, I'm pretty new to this platform and this is the first time I've ever purchase this kind of service. But I think your work is great and the essay now looks a lot better.
Sincerely,
Sean
Hi Sean,
I'm not sure which questions are unanswered. I haven't received any messages from you since I sent the second iteration. I'd be happy to answer a question if you let me know what you'd like my suggestion on.
All my best,
Jaclyn